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How I Would Write Jason in TOA?
Sorry if any of this feels disjointed. This is my first time doing a character and plot rewrite.
I think Jason had loads of potential to be a great character, but it was messed up in TBM.
If you want more details, I wrote a post about my thoughts: https://www.tumblr.com/criminalmutantsins/698742446518091776/jason-grace-deserved-better-this-is-just-my?source=share
To add on to the post, I’ll explain what I would change.
Jason and Piper are together in TBM, but there would be dialogue explaining how it was tough “starting over” their relationship(like Blood of Olympus very much hinted) and that they had to do individual soul searching before building a better foundation for their relationship. Piper would have doubts about their relationship and still question if Aphrodite and Hera’s interference is why they are together.
Piper’s father would still lose his money but earlier, so Piper would move back to Oklahoma. Jason would go back and forth between Camp Half-Blood, building plans for the shrines. They still communicate except as friends. This would give them time to individuate and learn more about themselves(they would be broken up). Piper would realize her bisexuality and become attracted to Shel. They date, but it only last for a few months because Piper still has feelings for Jason. Her doubts of the relationship are resolved; however, she waits so she doesn’t pressure Jason. Speaking of Jason, after working for months on the shrines, he wishes to take a break and start acting/doing things for himself(hang out with friends, relaxing, etc). Jason’s feelings for Piper are still the same and, after a while, he talks to her about it. They get back together with Jason going to Oklahoma to be closer to Piper and try living a regular life. This could be good representation on how relationships take a lot of work and time, but can be worth it when there is love and communication.
By the time The Burning Maze starts, Jason and Piper have been together for a month and are a stronger team. However, Jason is having trouble adjusting to having a normal because of his sense of responsibility to be a leader and protector. Between the couple getting together and TBM, they find another entrance to the Labyrinth and Jason learns about the prophecy. Safe to say, he is really stressed.
Instead of the prophecy saying that either Jason or Piper would die, I would change it to either one having to make a great sacrifice. Jason would still fight Caligula. It would be monumental for Jason’s character, and a big fight. Jason would lose, though he would escape with the group with grievous injuries and would be out of commission for the rest of the book. These injuries would result in Jason being paralyzed from the waist down, sacrificing a big part of his identity- being a strong fighter, something he is mostly known for. Jason would have to learn to adjust to the change and further learn more about himself. Though, thanks to Leo’s skills and a battle-ready wheelchair, Jason can still fight, he decides to mostly stay in the sidelines and be a tactician.
I’m Iffy on Zatanna’s Morally Gray Idea
I mostly have a problem with the execution of this plot line more than anything. I like heroes to be morally gray sometimes but for me to really gel with the idea, I would have to see the character struggle resorting to that risky decision.
I think seeing Zatanna constantly finding other ways to save her dad but them failing would’ve helped me feel more sympathetic towards Zatanna, and understand how desperate she is to find a solution.
Also, I would’ve done the reveal totally different(honestly I would’ve done her arc differently). Zatanna and her protégés would visit Nabu quicker than in canon, and he somehow lets her plan slip out in front of her students. They get mad but Zatanna tells them that it was not the time and the discussion will happen later.
Then, in the end, Zatanna realizes how effed her plan is and tells her students that they have a choice to say no. Zatanna would tell Mary she’s not ready while Traci and Khalid accept the deal.
man this one was the biggest yet, I had to cut some options due to some like the slitherwing, who wouldn't work with inexperienced trainers. (by that, I mean they'd die shortly after these guys hatched) they could still be introduced later, just not in the main lineup.
looks like the deadly nadder has won! up next we have (my personal favorite) mystery class!
NR Rewrite next dragon:
so update
I fractured my dominant arm yesterday, and I am currently unable to write stories or do art, (barely able to type this with my left hand) so anything related to the nine realms modern times rewrite will probably only be put on here after a month or so. I can still make the polls tho until then
sorry I was a bit late to the party, the monstrous nightmare wins! can't wait to start working on its character, up next we have Tracker class.
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designed two of the poll hybrids
(apologies if none of you can read my handwriting, I can make another post with all the stats/info on it if that's the case) this is their adult form of the whispering death/gronckle hybrid and the scauldron/thunderdrum hybrid's designs. Hers is based off of a gulper eel, and she lost her eye due to accidentally bashing it hard on a rock when practicing swimming. Since the technology is more advanced in this era, to reference hiccup making a tail prosthetic, the male hybrid would have one of those wheelchairs for dogs who's back legs are paralysed.
my apologies to those who missed this, I thought I'd put it at the usual time but it wasn't. The results will be a scauldron thunderdrum hybrid, (It would look a bit like a gulper eel I think) and stoker class is next.
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And the results are in! the Stormcutter has won by a landslide! my condolences to the speed stingers. Up next is Tidal class! (managed to catch this in the morning, so it'll be out quicker than this one was)
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And in a shocking development here folks, it looks like we have a tie between the gronckle, and the whispering death! Who will the victor be?
Well as it's a tie, it seems it will need to be a hybrid, that I shall be working on the concept art on next morning! I'll be sure to post the next pole in the morning as well, so stay tuned 👋
httyd in modern times NR rewrite. I'm using one dragon from each class in it for the main characters, and decided to put vote on it.
Basically whichever dragon wins will be one of the seven dragons character for the main characters to raise.
httyd in modern times NR rewrite. I'm using one dragon from each class in it for the main characters, and decided to put vote on it.
Basically whichever dragon wins will be one of the seven dragons character for the main characters to raise.
Hey,
If I were to tell y’all about my Minecraft Movie re-write that is nothing like the actual movie, would you guys be interested?
Because……..
...Im now thinking that...wouldnt be better for Niles and Smg0 to be tragic villains who had redemption arcs later on instead of dying?
...just..you know, thinking...
“Hoenn’s Big Three, The Gem Trio”
My friend and I’s AU, The Hybrid!Verse’s Hoennian Dex-Holders, Maybelle Birch, Eryn Lambert, and Brendan Stuart. The Hybrid!Verse is basically a rewrite of the Pokémon games with elements, characters and events from the anime, manga and Spin-off’s all in one universe.
Salty (My Friend who I helped co create the Hybrid!Verse) has already posted their rewrite of SWSH, though still unfinished. Check it out here!
https://archiveofourown.org/works/38717934/chapters/96805962
Meanwhile, “IGNEOUS”, my rewrite of ORAS is still a MASSIVE WIP and still being polished up before the first few chapters can be posted, stay tuned for that!
(P.S; Oh my God, I just realized the Grey on Brendan’s shirt is too low and I ONLY CAUGHT THAT NOW...)
God of War: Echoes of Suffering
(Chains of Olympus Rewrite)
5 years into his service to the gods, Persians attack Greece and Kratos defends his homeland against the Invasion under the charge of Athena. After driving the Invaders back, Kratos receives a vision from Athena attempting to warn him, but it is quickly cut off as the sun disappears. Now Kratos has to fight off a horde of living nightmares manifesting from an endless black fog.
The Ghost of Sparta was nearly enveloped by the black fog, until a small figure drove them away with a blast of light. The small figure in question looks almost exactly like Kratos’ deceased daughter, Calliope. Kratos tries to reach out to her in melancholic desperation, but she runs away, Kratos giving chase after his shock fades.
Kratos chases his “daughter” throughout the city until they reach a massive structure that looks as if it almost crashed into the ground. Inside the temple, Kratos is haunted by the melody of his daughter’s flute echoing through the halls. He was almost driven to the brink of madness until A woman drenched in red and orange light appeared before him, she called herself Eos - Bringer of the Dawn.
She informs Kratos that her brother Helios has been taken by Phobetor - The New master of Dreams, and all the Olympians have been lulled into a never-ending sleep. Few gods are awake to rule, so the world has been plunged into chaos.
Eos requests that Kratos use the Primordial Fire within the temple to release the Fire Drakons in exchange for a favor.
Once the Fire Drakons began to burn once more the temple glowed with blinding light, Kratos realizes he’s on the sun and tried to rein in the burning beasts, but his hands burned the second he touched the reins.
Just then Eos appears in front of Kratos and pulls reins of the Fire Drakons pulling the Sun Chariot to the sky driving back the horde of nightmares that enveloped the cities. Once they reached the heavens Eos informed Kratos that her brother was taken to the Underworld and he would need to get there in order to save him. Kratos argued why she could not have gone there herself, replying that as a goddess of light she had no power in the sunless realm. Kratos reluctantly agrees to the request in hopes that Eos would convince the other gods to free him from his suffering.
Eos contacts Hermes, one of the few gods still awake, and transports Kratos to the Underworld where he arrives on the shores of the River Acheron where he meets a soul which at first glance reminds him of an old friend from his Spartan days.
After short greetings the soul offers to be Kratos' guide to Phobetor, just then a blaring sound is heard and all souls on the shore gather to a dock. In the distance a gigantic boat appeared with a titanic figure at the helm; the guide refers to the figure as Charon, The Ferryman. Just before the boat was about to dock the guide cast a spell on Kratos to conceal his identity as a living, but once the shade cast the spell Kratos felt himself getting weak. Once they got onto the ferry they were accompanied by dozens, possibly hundreds of other souls each with blank or unmoving expressions.
The journey lasted for what seemed like days and during the trek Kratos fell into a slumber, in his dreams he saw his wife and child slaughtered by his own hand. It wasn't only them, his mother and his brother were among the bodies that were felled by his blades. As he breathes erratically, he can hear a voice taunting him from the dream's darkness, calling him a brute, a savage, a monster.
Just as the boat docks Kratos wakes up, he looks around and realizes that he and the guide are the only ones left on the vessel. The Guide and Kratos looked out past the dock and the only thing that could be made out was sand, nothing but swirling sand. The guide tells Kratos that this is Desert of Dreams; the section of the underworld where Phobetor has taken over. As the two arrive they are assaulted by a plethora of lesser Oneiroi and living nightmares which they must rip through to make it to the Ebon Citadel, Phobetor’s greatest fortress.
After barely surviving, they encounter an old man, sticking out amongst the almost infinite gold with wings of gray sand. He told the two traveler’s that Phobetor cannot be killed so they need something to contain him. Just then the elder began to dissolve into the sand but before he completely disappeared he left them with a small piece of advice,that they must confront the darkness in order to wake up.
Once the old man left a glowing amulet took his place, Kratos grabbed the jewel and the two continued on. After fighting through even more nightmares they reached the top of the citadel.
Once the two got to the top and opened the doors, they witnessed Phobetor: an amalgamation of screaming black faces forming a vaguely human shape, exactly wht a god of nightmares would look like. There, he was siphoning the energy of a tortured Helios.
The nightmare god had his back turned to them but the second Kratos and The Guide entered the room he lunged at them both with terrifying speed. Kratos used his blades to slice the spectator but it was pointless the creature mended every attack. It was then that Kratos realized that the amulet could be used to harm the god. As the spartan brought the nightmare to his knees, he used the amulet to imprison the horrible spector. After it was done, the Guide that had followed Kratos for most of his journey; began to laugh in an ominous way, calling Kratos the Great Tool of Sparta as the drkness left from Phobetor entered the soul's body. Kratos was then transported to a field surrounding by glowing golden sand, there he heard the song, the same one that had been haunting him, only now it was sounded more comforting.
Because of Phobetor's great acquisition of power, the Desert of Dreams had exapanded into parts of Elysium, and so, Phantasos transported Kratos to a little Oasis, and there Kratos was shocked to see the one thing he though he never see again: his daughter, Calliope. The two of them embraced in a hug, and for a short while, the Ghost of Sparta felt joy. Unfortunately for Kratos, this Joy was short-lived, Calliope began to wince in pain, her being fading in and out of existence as the sand grows ever closer. Just then, a woman drenched in warm inviting light appears before Kratos and his daughter, this was Makaria, first born of Hades and Persephone, Goddess of Blessed and Peaceful death, and Queen of Elysium. The goddess had informed Kratos who his "Old Spartan friend" really was: Phantasos, Master of Illusions, and the mastermind behind this whole conundrum.
Makaria explained everthing. Wanting the power to control the waking world, Phantasos manipulated Phobetor into overthrowing their brother Morpheus and seizing control of the Desert of Dreams. By consuming the power of his brother had taken, Phantasos’ power grew exponentially, allo him to lull the gods into a deep almost unending slumber. Now Phantasos had the power of the dream realm, the sun itself, and the Ghost of Sparta in his grasp. Now he wishes to let the Desert of Dreams consume everything until he and only he was the supreme god.
Kratos had to come to an impossible crossroad of descisions: stay in this fleeting paradise with his daughter forever while another mad god tries to take over the world, or leave Calliope, again. He didn't have a choice, but in his mind, in that moment, he chose to leave her. It took all of his strength to pry his daughter away, as she cried and begged him not to, but it was the only way. With tears in both eyes, the mighty and powerful Ghost of Sparta hugged his daughter one last time. Makaria gently extended her hand and Calliope went with her to Elysium.
Kratos made his way back to the citadel, agrier now than ever before. As he entered the building Phantasos tried to keep up the illusion of Kratos' spartan friend but it was pointless, the ghost of sparta usd the amulet to reveal Phantasos' true form, a cloud of smoke with shifting masks for faces, he threw daggers at Kratos in retaliation.
The illusion master used Kratos’ worst nightmares as weapons, visions of his wife and child berated him until he was brought to the floor. Only through his sheer rage was Kratos able to break through the illusions, and attack Phantasos.
Their fight broke Phobetor’s castle and brought them to the Desert of Dreams and Phantasos hid within the flowing sands, mocking the Spartan. Only after the dream god dared to say that Calliope deserved to die was Kratos able to grab Phantasos and pummel him into the ground. As The Ghost of Sparta pulled out the amulet, Phantasos, using all of his power, cursed the man with eternal nightmares, and just before the Illusion Master was sucked into the amulet, he berated the now broken warrior, telling him that his suffering shall never end.
Once the two Oneiroi were imprisoned within the amulet, the gigantic sandstorm that enveloped the desert began to settle and the elder from earlier appeared in the center where the citadel once stood, and and the swirling sands of the storm coelesed around the man showing the form of a gray figure with enormous wings, revealing himself to be Morpheus, the God of Dreams, he thanked Kratos for relieving him of his brothers, but it fell on deaf ears. Kratos begged the god of dreams to free him of his curse, but unfortunately it was impossible. Morpheus explained that Phantasos had his own power combined with Phobetor's and the power of the sun, nothing can remove Kratos' curse not even Morpheus.
Keeping his own promise to the gods, Kratos returns Helios to the temple. But he is left with the knowledge that he we never be free, forever plagued with visions of his family.
Weak from the days of battle, Kratos falls unconscious from the sun chariot, but is suddenly stopped before striking the ground. He was placed on the cliffs he later would jump from in the original God of War. Three figures approach the unconscious warrior, two of them revealed to Helios and Athena. The Gray Goddess retrieves the amulet as the Sun Titan removes the spell placed on the Spartan. Both Gods contemplate helping Kratos further but a shadowy figure behind them interjects saying that the Ghost of Sparta must “Walk his path alone.” The three beings exit through a portal leaving Kratos lying on the shore near the Aegean Sea.
Doodled the silly guy 💕💕 can't figure out how to do his arms but is okay cuz he doesn't make sense at all 🎉
And this is exactly at least part of why I'm rewriting HYLY on Ao3. That and the just all around more secure filtering system.
you read stuff on wattpad for shit and giggles where most of the fics there are reader-inserted ones written in 1st person pov where y/n is a barely legal white girl with blonde hair and blue “orbs” who’s so smol and fragile that she’s dependent entirely on this morally questionable guy who’s killing people for a living but for some reason happens to have a soft spot for her.
you read real actual literature on archive of our own where it’s two middle aged men, who are each other’s sworn enemies, with tragic past, trauma and strong homoerotic tension. and while they’ve made each other bleed, killed each other’s friends and loved ones out of jealousy / possessiveness, lied and betrayed and manipulated, the rawness, depth, complexity and slow burn will keep you up all night, haunt you during your day and possibly change your life forever. and also the sex isn’t just smut. the sex is poetry that puts Shakespeare to shame
My thoughts on Michaela
Ok first : disclaimer, I have read the book, ok angry Michael fan ? I have read the book, I read all of them.
You can guess where my thought is going : it definitely could work.
There's just something about Francesca being startled by Michaela but quickly stuffing those feelings down. She's a married woman and she DOES love John, in some way.
And then when she need Michaela the most, she vanished. (And maybe married to have a baby with some lord for the succession ?... To think about)
Then she comes back and Francesca starts to feel things but no she can't. It's John's cousin for heaven's sake she's betraying John again, she tried to have a child with him !!!She wants children, you need a man for children.
And it's wrong she's a woman, a lady. She always followed societal rules she does NOT like women. She is different enough, she doesn't need something else.
Then there's Michaela. She always liked Francesca, from the moment she saw her.
But it's impossible, she's John's wife, her almost brother's wife.
Francesca is a good woman she likes following the rules, she wants children, she's a perfect lady. No way she is like Michaela, attracted to girls.
And getting with her isn't just betraying John, it's betraying Francesca. She's already cast away from society, she wants children and she deserves it. John would want her happy and no way is Michaela going to make this impossible.
I've also seen people being worried because John was supposed to be Francesca's first love. But he can still be, sure she has a spark for Michaela but nothing more. John and her have a connection something deep, that's going to leave a real hole in her life.
And if anything worries about sex scene you can have consensual sex even if one isn't into it (an example that strikes me is in “The day of a fallen night” which is the most interesting, on a writing level, sex scene I've read)
Eloise should have been the villain in season 3
Listen, I'm the biggest Eloise apologist ever but I can't keep on defending her. She should have been the villain and it could have solved SO MUCH of the issues with the stories.
Eloise has been rejected by society the reality hits her hard after Penelope, rightfully, called her on her bullshit with the “not everyone can be a pretty Bridgertons” speech. And when she was at her lowest she learned that her friend is the one that betrayed her.
She was trying to make amends and to listen to her friends... And where did that get her ?
She's tired of society, she's tired of trying to fit in she just doesn't care. She's mean, she's unapologetic, she laughs when a suitor asks her to dance with him. She's gone. Because what's the point anyways ? She has already lost everything.
There's a lack of drama ? Eloise will GIVE that drama right into the household. Plus I mean a Bridgeton villain? With their capacity to get away with everything ? And it frustrates her because she's just proving Penelope right but she can't stop, she's on a rampage.
And here comes Cressida, always the mean girl, who sees in Eloise the reflection of what she is inside and she makes the first step towards her. What's more beautiful than her and Eloise both evolving out of this cycle, maturing hands in hands.
Eloise learns that people CAN change and as Penelope doesn't write about any of her wrong doing, she starts to see the light.
But she doesn't need to become directly bff with Penelope again, it's not realistic. People change and mature (which is an undertones of this season I'm kinda seeing ?). Things will never be the same again.
Also their friendship wasn't benefiting for none of them. Penelope and Eloise need to make their own space their own friends and grow.
The good news about this is that I'm getting TONS of idea for my rewrite lol
I didn't even watch a full episode and WTF ?!? ELOISE ?!? YOUR NEW BFF IS TELLING YOU THAT SHE'S GOING TO GET ENGAGED TO A GRANDPA ?!? Why aren't you doing anything ?!?
Like that is character assassination
Man I cannot wait to be done with exams because I have t h o u g h t s to share about Bridgerton.
Starting with talking about wtf I have seen and saw spoiler of with Benedict (I have already rewrote the scene with the Mondrich). Following by Eloise because what the fuckkkk did they do with her ?!? And then Polin (didn't like them in the book, don't like them in the show) and obviously Michaela.
^How I am currently, waiting for the right moment to drop my new post and brigerton rewrite
Rewritting of Bridgertons
First of I want to say that it is in no way me bashing Julia Quinn. She has wrote a popular book series that she managed to put on the screen and for that she deserves alot of respect.
BUT
The books are a hot messes for many, many, many reasons, the three last one are ok but still quite questionable.
(I am obviously in no way claiming to be a better writter or that what I'll do will be good but I decided to rewrite and change what I didn't like and what I think could do better. )
Important information about this rewrite :
As I had hard time with honestly any of the love interest, ESPECIALLY, the boys one (with the exception of my boy Gregory, you were boring but cute) and that I felt like the women character had honestly a waste of potential I will change all of them a LOT. I will also rant about why I didn't like them in the first place.
As the books are so messy I also consider the series as canon and I have a lot of confusion about the way the society and great experiments was done ?! Like honestly WASTED potential.
This will NOT be historically accurate my dear friends purely fictional as I'll state multiple time.
The Ton in the Bridgertons
We do not see much politics in the Bridgertons but as sexism exist you cannot brush over or make racism disapear in what 40 years ? I try to be sensible about but as I am a white individual I might make mistake and apologise if so and will correct it.
At first we would still keep the same hierarchy of power than the one in real life and, I assume, in the show.
Secondly let's talk about THE thing that changes everything in the Bridgertons : the Great experiment.
The Great experiment appeared for the same reason than show in Queen Charlotte but it's a bit more subtle. It was introduced mostly so Charlotte could marry the king George but never did the royal councils intended to actually give more power to the "other side" of the society. Even if people could now get invited and participate in activity didn't mean they'd be invited or treated well.
Queen Charlotte is actually the one who shacked things up, after mostly focusing on her marriage at first she slowly woke up and saw that despise what was said her own were still being rejected and treaded unfairly. By attending Lady Danbury ball, she shoke things up. When some titles were left without any heir she would think first of giving it to the "other side" (that's how Simon's dad became Duke) etc.
Even thought the Queen Charlotte promoted tolerance things didn't completely work out that way. The "original" Ton felt jealous and left alone and while they couldn't reject the other side at the more little scandal possible they would directly reject a familly. And while young did marry racized Lord it was almost UNFATHOMABLE that an eligible white Lord would marry a girl of colour. It got a little better but there is still a lot of pression on racized people. A few Lord did actually mary girls from the "other side" the most known one being St-Clair, Abernathy and the Sterlings leaving a lot of preassure on their children because they represent this new kind of union and must be perfect. So it is a big deal that so many of the Bridgertons will have union with people of the other side as they are one of the most old and respected familly.
Introduction of the blog
Hello pleasure to meet you all !
My name is, honnestly, whatever nickname you cancome off with this blog and my pronouns are they/them :)
I'm part of the epic museum sys ( discovered as off November. It's actually not even the right person writing this ). So this will all get updated soooon
This blog isn't a place where I intend to be the most active (barely understand tumblr lol) but where I'll talk about my writing and rewritting stuff !
I also already want to apologize for like all the grammatical fault I'll do, English isn't my first language.
My first rewriting project will concern the Bridgertons, more on that here :
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